The words over at Three Word Wednesday are backward, ease and omission.
Hopefully, by the end of the day, I will have a high-speed Interweb connection. Until then, I give you a drabble. Just a slip of fiction, in 100 words.
Prosthetics
She counts backward from 100, as he instructs. There’s some rustling, but she resists the urge to open her scrunched-tight eyes.
Hands move across her nakedness, raising gooseflesh. Her nipples are erect. Her heart races, nostrils flair with ragged breath.
She’s altogether tense, giddy.
He reaches for her legs. Something eases up her thigh, which elicits a gasp.
“Stand.”
She does as she’s told.
“Open.”
She marvels at the leg, stomps a heel, testing its heft.
It looks exactly like the one she lost.
But that’s an omission on her part.
It looks exactly like the one he took.
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12 comments:
Oooh, I thought knew where your cleverness was leading (and not just to the reveal of a prosthetic limb) -- but no, I should've known better. Subtle but vicious at the end. You should drabble more; I like it.
That's a brilliant play of words.
Very cleverly done.
She knew it was coming and thus the eager almost sexual anticipation. Great piece of mini fiction.
you had me at gooseflesh.
even in a mere 100 words you can raise the bar.
I liked all the lines. But I liked the last one best.
Terrific ending!
You had me going, even with the title as a tip off.
Great use of three words. Here is my attempt.
Nicely done - I tip my hat to you, sir!
Well controlled narration. Nicely done.
Tight and right, this one!
This was well done .Very descriptive turn of phrases as well.
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