Wednesday's Three Word Wednesday

The words over at Three Word Wednesday are demure, offend, volatile.

There She Is…
Miss Wisconsin 1979 lives in a cramped converted basement apartment that has a ½ in the address, like an afterthought.


A technician in a drug store photo department, she slips in-and-out of people’s lives one print at a time, wearing white cotton gloves as to not leave fingerprint evidence of her interloping.

The crown she earned so many years ago is part of an elaborate bunny ear construct, wire hangers, tin foil and tiara that allows her to get channels 3, 5, 6, 9 and sometimes 12 (but it’s fuzzy) on a tired 24-inch color television.

At home, she watches only the national newscast - the one with the older gentleman, since she feels like she can trust him - and knits stacks of dish towels she tosses casually in a wicker basket. After each nightly broadcast, she shuts off the television and eats her main meal of the day.


One protein, never bigger than a deck of cards, one green vegetable steamed, one starch (she’s been experimenting with new potatoes, as well as Yukon golds, with an ethnic shaker spice mix that has no salt) and one mixed-green salad, light on the dressing. Sometimes for a starch she’ll cook rice in a little steamer she found online, but she never eats corn – her mother told her once that ladies do not eat corn, on the cob or off.


When the sun leaves the sky, she meanders toward bed, yet allows herself a small snifter of brandy by candlelight as a way to unwind.

Dressing demure, like her mother taught her, she's partial to simple skirts to the knees in a neutral color (blacks and grays, mostly), pressed cotton shirt, sensible, functional shoes.

But under the skirt, she rebels. A trick she learned from Miss Kentucky those many years ago, her pageant roommate who taught her to wear French silk just so. Miss Kentucky, that dark-haired beauty with a thick country accent (she was voted Miss Congeniality by her peers in 1979) with whom Miss Wisconsin shared several brief, soft kisses late one night while trying on exotic finery.

Thigh-high stockings held snugly to her hips by a garter belt (how she loves the feel) and silk thongs also in neutral colors (she’s no slut). She likens the silken feel to wearing a warm breeze.


Swinging a canvas bag she’s decorated with rhinestones, she walks to work each morning with purpose, six blocks. The bag holds her starched lab coat, a sensible brown-bag lunch and a book she’s checked out from the library.

Flipping through stacks of prints, she’s appalled at how the photo memories of people have slowly morphed. From vacation shots at the lake, warm, wet skin and hair plastered to skulls and smiles and peace signs to fuzzy, underlit bedroom shots of sex and sweaty body parts, the women with their eyelids heavy, their eye makeup smudged. She makes mental notes how the men manage to keep their faces hidden and thinks it’s a double standard. The thought never fails to raise a flush rosy color to her cheeks.

There's a vulgarity to the photographs and shudders at the crudeness, yet runs her manicured fingers across her silk-clad calf, raising gooseflesh as she goes.


Lately at lunch, she’s taken to spying on the younger women who chatter at the corner table, the one littered with energy drink cans and fast-food wrappers. These are the volatile women who pick at their split, bloody cuticles, are covered with tattoos and piercings and curse like sailors through mouths painted in dark, forbidden tones.


They seem so dangerous. So exotic.


How would they react, she wonders, if she asks to join them. She clicks a manicured nail against her bleached-white teeth.

And instead, takes a small bite of sandwich, a simple filling on sensible whole wheat with the crusts sawn off, and drifts back to her book, not wanting to offend.

33 comments:

pia said...

If you didn't have the tag "flash fiction" I would have thought this real. I would have wondered how one who probably hasn't seen 50 yet could seem so born in the 20's or 30's but that's what makes the world go round...
Wonderful writing--held me captive

Michael Solender said...

So many things to like about this piece - the lead is great, love the concept of afterthought. lots of nice detail behind the congeniality back-story. A couple of things stand in the way of making it stronger - email me offline if you want a few thoughts that i think would help.

VL Sheridan said...

"Silk thongs also in neutral colors (she's no slut)"

This was brilliant. Love the detail about the way the photo memories have morphed into something slightly sordid.

Susannah said...

Just brilliant, you delighted me with every word. :-)

I really enjoyed this tale.

My 3WW

christopher said...

This is a great character study. I feel like I have met this woman.

Angel said...

Great summation of a life.

R.S. Bohn said...

I'll sound like a broken record, but you've got the gift of adding details to a piece that don't get in the way, but only make it fuller and more real. Like switching from a "regular" channel on the tv to a HD one. And you do it seamlessly.

Such a great character piece. This one really pulled me in.

I think I would've loved the ending if she just got up -- and then you left us there, to decide ourselves what she would do. But on the other hand, what she did do fits perfectly with what you've told us about her.

Kudos, darling, on a very strong flash fic piece.

maglomaniac said...

As usual picturesque.
But this style of writing that seems more of a reality than a story is teh first one that I have read from your side.
Liked it.

~Harsha

J.C. Montgomery said...

Being that I graduated HS in '79, this character and piece struck me deep. But than again, all your writing has that effect on me.

But this one in particular.

Jeni Mc said...

so I love this for all the wrong reasons.

I love it because every little girl dreams about being "Miss ....." and getting a tiara.

I love it because we grow up thinking they live the beautiful life.

and so often they dont..... and I love that to. :)

Thomma Lyn said...

As always, Thom, magnificent work. Loved the well-woven detail and cutting-edge wordsmithery. Miss Wisconsin really comes alive for me.

Dreamer said...

Amazing work! Loved the little details. They've worked so well in making the character come to life. The second paragraph almost reads like a poem!

Bernard S. Jansen said...

Completely unrelated to this flash, I've passed on to you The Versatile Blogger Award at my How to Get Published blog.

K said...

The details is what makes this portrait of a sad and yet content life. She is so many women and yet everything we never want to become.

Terrific as always.

shail said...

Loved the way the character came alive through the details. :)

Deborah said...

I love the way you write, I start listening to the story rather than reading!

jaerose said...

What a touching story. I was completely transported into Miss Wisconsin's world. It was superbly judged - poignant but not dripping in sadness..great stuff (and thanks for your visit!) Jae

Christine said...

Loved this piece start to finish, particularly the fact that the crown is used for TV reception. So clever!

Nanka said...

The fabric of this fiction is so beautifully spun and woven that it kept me glued to it.

Loved the character, sad tinges but could be anybody's true story.

Jay Thurston said...

The build up of this character's world was full of precise details, and the "grass is always greener" reflection she had at the end really brought it full circle.

Carrie said...

I really like your story! Witty, secretive, even...dare I say...sexy? Excellent.

Deanna Schrayer said...

Thom, I LOVE this! As everyone has already mentioned, the detail of Miss Wisconsin is sharp, (the HDTV reference is spot on).

This left me wanting to know so much more. I hope you'll consider giving it to us.

Crystal said...

I love this piece. It has a cadence that sucked me into it from the opening sentence.

Ann (bunnygirl) said...

What a fascinating portrait of an ordinary individual. The irony, of course, is that one assumes all beauty queens go on to have fabulous lives of wealth, travel and prestige. I suspect the reality for many is more as you suggest. I have a cousin who was runner up for Miss New Mexico and her life isn't glamorous at all.

pegjet said...

Since you called this a character study, are you planning on including her in a longer work?

She is fascinating, probably because she is so well drawn out in this flash.

Sulci Collective said...

this was great, truly. Loved the crushing status report of her address having a 1/2 in it 7 her bunny crown's humble service as a TV arial.

marc nash

Amity said...

I was about to believe this was real...:)

Very nice story Thom! Very entertaining and I love the visuals you portrayed here!

How do you churn out interesting tales like this one?

Gracie said...

Wow, gorgeous writing. Love this piece! I could see her and her life so clearly, it's like I know her.

I'd love to see her in a longer piece too... maybe when she changes her mind and goes to talk to the "dangerous" girls. :)

Excellent story.

vandamir said...

This is so rich and detailed, like the tapestry of someone's life, woven with care. Gorgeous writing, fascinating character.

Rachel Blackbirdsong said...

This is really an great character study. I feel that I really know this woman after reading your exquisite descriptions of her. What a lonely life she's made for herself.

Jane Doe said...

This is an amazing write. The details (for instance, her dinner selection) really go a long way to fleshing out the character in a short piece. Great writing!

Jeeves said...

Exotic indeed! Do many of us go through such conflux of emotions and thoughts!

Steve Green said...

Quite steamy and thought-provoking.

There is a lot of wanton yearning, and lusty thoughts going on behind the sensible shoes and neutral colours.