The words over at Three Word Wednesday at bicker, nervous and trajectory. Something short, bittersweet.
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We bicker.
It’s like a nervous tic between us, like picking at cuticles until they bleed. And they always bleed.
We notch slings on archer’s bows, aim for the heart, but fail to let go the string at the last minute.
Until last night, when I let an arrow – all this pent-up sorrow – go.
A trajectory for your heart. Pierced, shot clean through. My wince at your pain, the burning of tears that cascade down your flushed cheeks.
The couch is cool and uncomfortable, penitence for my sins.
But your silence. The roar of your nothingness trembles across my eardrums, makes me nauseous, listening to my own blood course through veins, capillaries.
Just give me the chance to explain.
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"A trajectory for you heart."
How true is that? It sure has felt like that in the past. The couch is not far enough away, a snow bank maybe? :-)
Wonderful.
Ah, it's all in the explaining - if we ever get the chance.
Short but very sweet, too.
This is fantastic. I love it. You words make such a familiar feeling come to life on the screen so well. It's fantastic.
Happy Wednesday!
*I always wondered about the words... now I have one less random thought circling my mind to distract me during times I should be concentrating on important things. I don't appreciate that one bit.
This is fantastic. I love it. You words make such a familiar feeling come to life on the screen so well. It's fantastic.
Happy Wednesday!
*I always wondered about the words... now I have one less random thought circling my mind to distract me during times I should be concentrating on important things. I don't appreciate that one bit.
Thanks for the edit, Thom! Man, I just picked a hanger off my thumb yesterday! And it was a bleeder, reading this had me flicking at it and somehow enjoying the mild pain. I think it took my mind off of this all too familiar Communication Breakdown! It's always the same.... Great insight, Thom!
but will the explaination matter? Words that I said and wished I had never said were-"what's done is done"
Thanks for your sparkling encouraging words, I know I am not the only one going through something tough right now.
Best wishes for you and your dad.
true. sometimes bickering is what bonds.
Regret!!
Nice post...He should get a chance...Give her some time..
Roar of the nothingness. Can anything be worse than that?
It somehow hit home..
Hopefully he'll get the chance to explain. Some hurts do take longer to get over though.
missed 3WW and your writes !! glad to be reading again :) n i just loved this one so much !!!
Why does it always seem so clear from the couch?
Ah, the bicker addiction. We're in the same channel - interesting how the words take one to 'that' place where 'it' comes alive. Excellent, as always, ThomG.
Phew, the roar of nothingness! The sound of his conscience, perhaps?
Very wise. How often do we let go with a verbal weapon that turns out to be the equivalent of bringing a nuke to an air gun fight?
Like the others, I liked the "roar of nothingness" bit, but I was especially struck by "the couch is cool and uncomfortable, penitence for my sins." One doesn't think of penitence being comfortable.
Well done.
Short but powerful! I loved 'A trajectory for your heart. Pierced, shot clean through.'...felt I could identify with that! Really liked this.
Bella
Great description, great flow to this piece, and who hasn't slept on the couch because of something said that probably needed to be said, but probably shouldn't have been said.
"We notch slings on archer’s bows, aim for the heart, but fail to let go the string at the last minute." you mean like uncock the string? like not shoot the arrow? I was thrown by the word "fail" in this sentence. But I loved the story. Weird we both used "wince" and "nervous tic/tick" this week... good words, liked 'em! -Meg
Yes indeed...you have some 'splaining to do!
b
ah the dark side of the couch... i thought it was always... thaz my story and im stickin to it... great description of the agonies of a relationship...
You nailed this, I felt a cold breeze.
I swear I posted Wed. but I posted again. Sorry if it duplicated. Thanks for your words.
Lovely:)
I was thinking the same thing, FANTASTIC! I've suffered the silence. It is awful.
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