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Saturday Night in the ‘Burbs
Jon’s spirit guide was a mole that talked with a raspy lisp, kind of like that little guy on that show that yelled something about a plane.
We were all laughing, as it kept yelling at us, “Thish way, thish way!” and we’re rolling on the floor.
Of course, the flames had already reached the ceiling and were spreading toward the stairs before we started to really worry.
We were in Kepple’s basement, the five of us – Jon, Lance, Kepple, Drayton and me - drinking Mezcal and eating mushrooms before going out. Drayton gets the bright idea to start some shit, you know, get under Kepple’s skin since he’s really tripping, so he layers like a dozen board games on this table his mom has being doing a nearly completed jigsaw puzzle. It’s one of those ones with like a gagillion pieces, some famous painting by some dead European dude.
Anyway, Drayton stacks up the games and starts flicking lit wooden matches at the strata of family fun. I think the box of Life caught first, something about the old, oily-fingered box that made it the perfect accelerant for this huge pyre.
That’s when the mole shows up, yelling for Jon to follow.
Of course, the severity of the situation was lost on us. Until Lance begins beating the flames with a broom he’s found, one of those plastic ones, and every arc sends gobs of flaming plastic across the room, igniting books, stacks of holiday decorations in dry-tinder boxes, the ugly-ass wallpaper Mrs. Kepple picked out for the “rumpus room.”
Even the 70s orange shag is on fire, yellow flames on an orange background that quickly goes black.
Kepple’s face-down in the flames, his hands a death-grip around his throat. His polyester shirt is melting patterns across his back.
Drayton screams. Lance is crying in a corner, thumb in his mouth; he's hugging what's left of the broom, just a green metal shaft.
Jon starts to follow the mole through a hole in the flames.
I'm choking, taking in "the big picture" and there's a calm. And then a tug on my jeans. I look down into the beady blackness of a penguin’s eyes looking up at me in earnest.
“OK, sport, this way,” it says, pointing a flipper through a narrowing hole in the conflagration and shaking its beak. “Welcome to the afterlife Einstein.”
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17 comments:
it may be dark, but it's also filled with a wicked sense of humor. Loved it! :~)
Surreal:)
Welcome to the afterlife Einstein...Good post :) I like your casual way of writing..
Hi Thom, love the ending!
Dark but so surreal - fitting for the storyline.
I love the ending. The whole post made me laugh out loud. The casual way you write draws me in and as always, by the end it's a surprise to me where you go.
I don't see anything 'casual' about your writing - I've told you this before but I think your amazing - one of the best writers I have ever read in cyberspace - perhaps the better descriptor would be accessible, or urbane but not casual... that fact that they're tripping and the spirit guide we're initially introduced to is a result of that or the afterlife and not a sci-fi harry potter episode is brilliant. The setting, flow, pace, unravelling story arc all done so clearly and concisely. I was smilingthe whole read through too. I have a soft spot for short fiction that is written so well it feels casual. If you can't tell I loved it.
You fuckin' pyro...
I loved the story, Thom.
I find it amazing that your words and images are some completely in the story - not a misstep into a similar world...always right in tune. Wonderful, wonderful.
Now that was a creative tale. I loved the ending. :)
Dude, this rocks. The last word really completes it in a sublime way.
I think I've missed a few weeks of making the rounds, but I'm really liking how you are changing the voice and tone of your entries these days. Don't get me wrong--I think you've got that staccato deadpan very strong. But each week you're matching the voice to the piece perfectly. Still a huge fan.
Well you already know how I feel about this piece, doncha, you silver tongued cornhusker! Thanks for leading me to this today. I might've missed it otherwise, being so darned consumed with myself and noses and such these days.
Bloody brilliant.
I have already started thinking-what all Einstein would do in this already modernized world..
but he is still very much Welcome..
and fun read..
thanks.
oooh.
I SOO much like visiting the worlds that you lead us to.
Big book with small stories.
Leather bound, embossed, heavy, small pages....
Mezcal and shrooms will do it to you every time (so I'm told). Ilove flash fiction, especially the way you write it. Of course Life caught on fire. What else, and the penguin led you to the afterlife because? (don't tell me, I'll figure it out.) You make it look so easy.
That one was different. Loved the descriptions.
I could see the bits of that plastic broom melting waving in the air sending the tiny flames everywhere...
my brother used to flick lit matches at bugs- even in the house, it's a wonder he didn't burn the house down.
great story.
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